chubbiechuchu!!!!!

A girl in her school uniform and plain black flats with dark eyes, dark brown curly hair that was tied together was walking in an ally from school. The girl saw some guys. The a kid was bleeding and bruised . The other guys were kicking and punching him.
"Stop," she yelled. She was horrified at what the guys were doing to the little kid.
The guys turned around. They were all wearing her school's uniform. She recognized one of the guys. He was the school's second most "hawtest" popular guy. Mysterious, cold and quiet. No girl could not notice him. He has dark shiny hair that he spikes up everyday it seems.
"Justin! Tell your friends to stop!" She cried.
Justin put on a disgusted face.
"Why isn't it Miss Popular," He laughed. "What do you want?" He asked.
"Stop hurting him!" The girl said.
"Lets make a deal. Why don't you go out with me and I'll tell them to stop." Justin said playfully.
She was stunned. The guys laughed. "She'll never do it." They all whispered.
"Fine...." The girl thought it was a bad choice but she had to help the boy.
The gang was silent for a moment.
"It's a deal then." He said nervously. What she didn't know was that he that he didn't want to fall for anyone. She was different though. He liked her. Justin smiled. Something that he haven't done in a long time.
He smiled she thought. How nice? She helped the little boy up. "Thank you." The little boy muttered. He ran home. There was a problem though. How can she tell this to her dad? She decided to tell her closest childhood friend Jake. She loved him. She was sure that here dad adored Jake. She overheard her dad telling her mom that he wanted Jake as his son. This was a big problem.
"What now?" Justin asked. "How 'bout I'll take you somewhere?"
The girl looked at her diamond encrusted watch. She was late.
"Another time? I'm really late for something. Please?" She asked sweetly.
"Whatever." She was cute he thought. But I'm gonna stay my character when I'm with her.
He said to himself.
"Bye." She said.
"Later."

A yes from me~
It's really cute. ^^
Uhmmm, although you do have some grammatical & tense errors. No biggy.

first vote AGAIN :DD

Yeah I know. Grammar is my worst subject in reading. I'm working on it though.

Worst subject in reading?!?!?!?!?! What am i talking about? lol

LOOOL.

@ magic4tw
I GOT FIRST VOTE. IS THERE STH WRONG WITH YOUR COMP??!

Not really.....

^ ? >_<

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Haha. Nothing. o3o

Okay then.

uhh.. wats going on here...?

stuff. o3o

can i say no shit?
woops jst did